Recent Comments
Andy in Page 16: Holly, thanks for clearing all that up. Since [...]Gozer the Carpathian in Page 200: It is always great to watch the evolution [...]
Gozer the Carpathian in Page 67: Anyone else think, “I don’t know how but [...]
Holly in Page 16: @Andy: Drew wasn’t trying to sway your interest [...]
Andy in Page 16: Oh, I thought you might want someone reading [...]
Last panel you forgot the ‘n’ in confident. But that’s okay because at this point you were probably almost ready to pass out ha
Damn! lol, I knew I’d miss something.
Thanks for the help, Rachel!
-Holly
Just going to comment again that you’re really doing a great job of selling the character relationships in the redone prologue!
Hey, just stumbled across this comic, and I like what I see so far. There is one line on this page that reads kinda awkward to me. Agrippa in Panel 2:
“We hiked in from just 25 kilometers from here.”
Using from twice in such close proximity kinda tripped me up. You may consider changing it to something like:
We hiked in from just 25 kilometers away.”
Just a suggestion.
Now, to continue my archive binge . . .
Yeah, I totally agree. I guess I just didn’t notice before. Thanks for pointing that out, when I re-letter the prologue (for print) I’ll make a note to fix that.
I really like what I’ve seen so far… nice art, especially the shading. Just one small quibble (coming from an EMT): a broken bone is a fracture and a fracture is a broken bone. Most people think they are different things, or different degrees of injury, but they aren’t, and a soldier with basic field training would know that. I realize that is pedantic, but just thought I’d bring it to your attention. Keep up the good work!
To Jeremy: Not always the case, I remember doing basic training and during the first aid portion of the course they never once mentioned that. I was also in for awhile and the entire time no one told me that. I had to use Google to actually find the proof to tell you the truth. But that’s just such a minor thing it doesn’t really matter to much. lol thanks for the info though.