Discussion (3)¬

1. Ian says:

   September 12, 2010 at 6:19 pm

   Ooooh. Winter’s is doing a pretty good job of selling the mission, and this makes Drysdale’s loyalty (given his apparently ethical character) a lot more believability. I like!

   I’m not sure you’re selling the racism as well as you could, though. There are occasional references to “lesser species” but this attitude doesn’t seem too prevalent beyond Winters, and in order for Drysdale not to blink at the lesser species comment would require it to be a very common (if perhaps unspoken) position for most members of the Terran military. Even if they don’t bring it up often (after all, it goes without saying, right?) it should be reflected in priviledged and superior attitudes when interacting with other species, right?

   On the other hand, there haven’t been a lot of opportunities to show that kind of sense of superiority, so perhaps it’s just because I haven’t been viewing the prologue with “fresh eyes”.

   I’m really liking what I see in the prologue so far, it works a LOT better than Grey’s narration did! Good work!

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2. Blake says:

   January 7, 2011 at 7:21 am

   Nitpicky, but I think “growing group of terrorists” might flow better than “group of terrorists growing”

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3. cico34 says:

   July 12, 2011 at 1:17 am

   First panel, “There is a growing group of terrorists in the galaxy” might be a better way to say it.

   Just noticed there was no “a” in the speech bubble

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